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Thursday, 13 July 2017

Winter Learning Journey: Day 6 | Activity 1

For the first activity of day 6 for the Winter Learning Journey, we learnt about the first waka that came to New Zealand. We had a challenge to write a poem about what we would feel if we were on that waka, and what you would see.

My Poem: We are travelling travelling travelling travelling travelling across the water.
I think i'm scared I think i'm scared, or maybe by just a quarter.
There are hills and pits rivers and spits and many many mountains.
There are a lot of things here, and I might just need to count them.
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  1. Unknown13 July 2017 at 11:43

    Hi Jack,

    Nice poem! I like your use of repetitive phrases and of rhyming couplets. The repetition of key phrases makes me, as a reader, really take notice of them. Like you, I would have been quite scared to be one of the first explorers to set foot on New Zealand shores. There were so many unknowns and so much work to be done to build homes, find food and establish communities. I really admire the men and women who first settled NZ. I wonder where we would be without them...

    Cheers,
    Rachel

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  2. Jack13 July 2017 at 15:39

    Thank you Rachel for your encouragement.
    I'm currently staying with my cousin, and she said it's quite a good jingle. Haha, but besides that thank you for commenting on my post and I can't wait for when you come back in term 3.

    - Jack

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  3. Jeremiah13 July 2017 at 17:39

    Hi Jack great poem. This poem is very fun to read and is one of the best I've read so far. Keep up the great work.

    Jeremiah

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    1. Jack14 July 2017 at 08:40

      Thank you Jeremiah.
      I figured someone else would eventually say that once they read it knowing I was singing it non-stop after I had wrote it. Besides that have a good holiday.

      - Jack

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  4. Unknown14 July 2017 at 13:02

    It really is a great little jingle! I will see you early in Term 3. I'm really looking forward to it! The staff and students at Panmure Bridge do such a lovely job of making me feel so welcome :)

    See you soon!

    Rachel

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  5. Ohhsen18 July 2017 at 17:56

    Hi Jack. I like your poem. I would also be scared if I didn't know anything about New Zealand and it was my first time going there. You have been doing a great job. Keep up the amazing work.

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  6. daniel19 July 2017 at 14:22

    Hello Jack
    Great poem! I like how you did a bunch of rhyming lines (Pits, spits, water, quarter). Keep up the amazing work Jack.
    Daniel

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  7. Alex21 July 2017 at 09:32

    Hi Jack
    Nice poem! It's the best I've seen and it really rhymes. How long did it take for you to think it up?
    Great work

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    1. Jack23 July 2017 at 19:14

      Hi Alex.
      Funnily enough it took only about two minutes, and even though it is a very short period of time, I would say that it is surprisingly the best I've ever written (Knowing that it's the most recent). Thanks for your feedback, and friendly attitude you used to evaluate this to me. See you tomorrow!

      - Jack

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  8. aminiasi22 July 2017 at 19:45

    Hello Jack, you have written a great poem. I really like how you have added in some rhymes. If I was one of the first people to land in New Zealand I would feel excited. Well Done.

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