Poetry: Two Day Wonder Re-written

This week we had yet another session of poetry. For this session of poetry we read the poem, Two Day Wonder, by David Hill. This poem shows the differences between feeling sick, and feeling well. This poem included a lot of words that quite a lot of people would never use when writing. So changes needed to be made. Our task was to re write the poem in our own words. Although the poem needed to compare going to school on a day of summer, comparing to going to school on a day of winter, and needed to include more sophisticated words. This was a collaborative task, so I worked with Fraidoon and Sanujan.

Winter

I struggle to wake up, as I resist to get out of my warm bed.

I was stuck in the rain yesterday, now I have a fever, and a boiling head.

I dawdle through the icy smooth floor, chuck on my uniform, and go to boil the kettle.

I felt like I slept for days, maybe I’ll even get a sleeping medal.

I chuck on my bag, and scurry my way out the door.

I need to get to school fast, because I make it back home at quarter past four!

I have half an hour left, so I need to run.

Although I forgot my lunch, looks like I need to purchase a cinnamon bun.

Summer

As I leapt out of my bed I hear the birds carolling and chirping away.    

The bright leaves rush and gush in the breeze as they sway.

The sun peered over me like it was just waiting to give me a hug.

I say hello, stride to the kitchen, and boil the jug.

I assemble and eat my breakfast, and prepare to brush my teeth.

I then walk outside, and put up the christmas wreath.

Then I kiss my mum goodbye and dash my way to school.

But I make sure to check my bag, because that’s the school day rule.